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1/27/2012

I know that my book doesn't have a good plot and isn't well written. This is my very first rough draft of it and I intend to make it better... later. So please tell me what I can improve on, what you guys would like to see, and what you liked. Thanks!!!!!!!

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Jill

8/6/2012 01:00:04 pm

Hi EM! I have read to the Dinner and Dancing section so far. I love the setting and the new world you've created.

I like how you play with words for the names of people and things. :-) Your use of dialogue is great; it keeps the story flowing. I could actually visualize the scene where the Nagella gets stuck in the seat and Cinerec comes and taunts her.

I'll read more tomorrow. I can't wait to see what happens from here!

Jill

8/13/2012 02:48:17 am

OK...I finished what you've written. Wow! I can't believe she just pushed her out of the elevator! Ha! :-) I thought, "NO, she has your regulator necklace on!" Then Ella realizes what she's done. I love it! I'm interested to see what role Patrick will play in the rest of the book, and Miss Cinerec needs an attitude adjustment! :-) I can't wait to see how it ends!

Taylor

2/25/2013 09:56:13 am

HeyI was reading Chanda Hahns comments and came across yours. I thought i should check it out. I really like the storyline. Please keep writing on it. I would like to see how it ends.

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